Awesome, once again. Your structure creates a perfect circle of consequence, from the dirt of the hilltop to the chrome of the station. The Twilight World imagery, the peppery air, the black finger of smoke, all set a tone of terminal exhaustion. The Schrödinger ref made me smile and the "Smart" failure of the sensor lights was a masterstroke of ironically poetic justice. Intelligent, visceral, and deeply satisfying. Great stuff!
Glad to hear you enjoyed it! I have a similar piece, “The Nominal Dragonfly”, which you might also appreciate if this one caught your fancy. It’s a bit of a longer read though, so consider yourself forewarned.
Awesome, once again. Your structure creates a perfect circle of consequence, from the dirt of the hilltop to the chrome of the station. The Twilight World imagery, the peppery air, the black finger of smoke, all set a tone of terminal exhaustion. The Schrödinger ref made me smile and the "Smart" failure of the sensor lights was a masterstroke of ironically poetic justice. Intelligent, visceral, and deeply satisfying. Great stuff!
Glad to hear you enjoyed it! I have a similar piece, “The Nominal Dragonfly”, which you might also appreciate if this one caught your fancy. It’s a bit of a longer read though, so consider yourself forewarned.
https://jameskenwood.substack.com/p/the-nominal-dragonfly