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Ken W.'s avatar

I thought the action scene was pretty awesome. The atmosphere, the actual action, the way he kept going back to Jessie's death were all great. I kind of got the context but it took a lot of thinking.

I think it doesn't need change. I think it needs a before scene. Something with the tension of the Ganymede protectorate hanging over their heads.

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Breezee Puffkins's avatar

I'm not crying, you're crying.

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